Bad writing alert! (Thanks, Associated Press.)

While reading this article about Hillary Clinton's visit to India, so much bad writing jumped out at me that I just had to share it with you. Apparently the AP no longer has editors.

First, I notice that she's back to Hillary Rodham Clinton. Wasn't she just Hillary Clinton during the primary? It's hard to keep track.

You might wonder where she was speaking in Mumbai:

"Speaking at a news conference on the pool side patio of the Taj Mahal Palace & Hotel, which was strewn with bodies after terrorists attacked this coastal city last November..."

Sweet Jesus, the patio was still strewn with bodies? It's like 8 months later. Maybe they had a hard time retaining janitorial staff after the attack. I would have had my news conference at a non-body-strewn part of the hotel, but that's just me.

If the AP still had editors, they might have changed it to something like:

"Speaking at a news conference at the Taj Mahal Palace & Hotel, which was the subject of a terrorist attack last November..."

Here was another great line. This isn't bad writing per se, but it's written in code:

"Her voice rising, Clinton insisted that the U.S. demand for international action against terrorist should not be taken lightly."

"Her voice rising"? You mean "Her voice rapidly becoming shrill and unbearably strident..." I just did a search for "Hillary Clinton" & shrill and came back with 65,700 hits. That's fewer than I thought. There were 44,200 hits for "Hillary Clinton" & strident, and a mere 27,700 for "Hillary Clinton" & shrew.

I did enjoy that, like China, India is giving a big "screw you" to Democratic calls for capping carbon emissions. Because let's face it: as the earth continues to cool, now more than ever we need carbon emissions to help keep us warm.

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